Comments Made During the Contest

Ayal Pinkus (Level 5)

I like the multiple meanings the title can have in this story.

The story is told very visually, I like it!

You clearly know about horses. It shows.

I suspect you carefully design your pages, you look at how the text will look. Many paragraphs are carefully measured to fill exactly two lines. That can not be coincidence.

On page 2 I think the voice-over from Miranda belongs to the next scene and should perhaps be Miranda off-screen?

One thing that felt unnatural, or unfinished, to me was the fact that Miranda was going to race as Julie lay in the hospital. It is about priorities, stakes. I would think a daughter being in hospital would be more important than winning some local race.

Right now I think Miranda (who seems to be a nice person, some one willing to help others, to put others' needs before her own, a motherly figure) would rather be in hospital with Julie than doing that one race. There will be more races.

I think you have to amp the stakes up a bit. Maybe have the race price be a million, and the mother and daughter about to lose their farm to the banks due to them not being able to pay their debt, having to put their horses out because they are too old and no one else will want them. The million will allow them to keep the farm and provide a nice retirement home for the horses. Or some such.

A wonderful and warm story and really well written! It was a pleasure to read, I loved it.

Bill Clar (Level 5)

What is a "warmblood"? I see no definition for it. I assume it's a horse.

I like the frayed show ribbons. That speaks volumes.

You detail a lot of inside information during Taz's final jump. It's great writing for a short story, but how will this play out on screen? How will the audience know it's a perfect jump?

Both Julie and Miranda say "she doesn't get to decide anything today". It felt like an unanswered question. What does Taz get to decide? I was hoping it would be resolved at the very end.

You clearly know about horses and show riding.

A couple of places would benefit from a comma, but nothing serious.

Your story is solid and your characters have depth. Good pacing. Great tension during the competition.

Brian Howell (Level 5)

Pros:

Very descriptive and knowledgeable in regards to horses. The last ride was very visual; I liked it.

Cons:

There wasn't any tension. I'm not sure why I should really be cheering for Julie's horse to complete the course. If she doesn't, then so what? I was more interested in Julie, but you left her over on the hill, bleeding. There would have been tension if we were to see Julie fall off of Taz while running down the hill too, but again, you stayed inside the ring and had me watching the other competitors warm up.

You need some sort of character description. Gender and age aren't enough. I felt like you put more effort into describing the horses than you did your human characters. As a reader, I will sympathize with an animal, but I will connect with a person - unless the animal is acting in a much more human-like way (ie talking). Focus this story on the people and you will go along way.

The number falling out never had a pay-off. Is this why Miranda wasn't competing herself? If so, isn't it a little late to be registering for the competition the day before? I was kind of let-down by that never going anywhere.

Brian Wind (Level 5)

This is written and formatted pretty well.

The pace was slower than it could have been due to heavy use of "insider" jargon. If someone isn't familiar with competitive horse racing (which I am not), there are a TON of terms in this script that the reader will not know the definition of. Clearly the writer has a lot of knowledge on the subject, but I don't think it should be assumed that everyone that reads this script will. With that in mind, it wouldn't hurt to dumb it down a bit for the rest of us. It'll help the script flow smoother because the reader won't have to stop every other sentence and re-read it to try to figure out the meaning of the unfamiliar word they just read.

The story was okay. Basically, a rider gets hurt right before the big show and her friend takes over, ends up winning. There was a lot of information here that ultimately had nothing to do with the actual story. For example, did we really need a half page about braiding the hair? It didn't really have anything to do with anything and thus, felt like filler. There was no big climax, twist or punchline at the end. I assumed the horse would win as soon as we learn it was going to be in a competition.

A nice effort, but I recommend getting rid of a lot of the insider jargon that anyone unfamiliar with the sport wouldn't know.

Caroline Coxon (Mod Emeritus)

Oh I LOVE stories about horses!

You are plainly someone who knows as much about them as I do - or more!

I loved all the details but I did feel the ending was a little on the predictable side, much though I was pleased Miranda won. I guessed it almost from the first scene.

Cecilia Potenza (Level 3)

The script created a very visual read. The dialog was very natural between Julie and Miranda. I didn't really understand the reason for the phone number. Why was she thinking about taking a class in jumping if the last show was the next morning? Overall though, I enjoyed it and I liked the dialog a lot.

Chris Keaton (Level 5)

- First action block reads awkward, I suggest reworking it.
- Girls like horses.

Huh? All this fine writing for what? A moment in the life of a horse person? I guess there was an understated drama that these jumps had to be done? But pretty much just a horse rider fantasy. Sorry, I was in it waiting for something to happen and then nothing. Maybe work this into a larger story, so we can care about the race thing?

Chris Messineo (Founder)

I thought this was a real nice story.

The craft here is very good and I could picture everything perfectly.

But, as someone who knows nothing about horses or horse competitions, I had a hard time connecting with the drama.

It felt almost like a slice of life moment, what makes this time and this ride so special?

I really did like this, but in the end, it didn't move me.

Denise Jewell (Level 4)

Nice job. I can see this visually, although I was a little confused by the horse barn lingo (I don't know what you mean by "cross-ties"). You do a wonderful job of defining the two characters - Anna experienced and calm, and Julie young and feisty (like their horses!) At first I though they were mother and daughter, but then realized that might not be the case. I was probably reading myself into it because I have an 18 year old daughter. Anyway, it works better if they're not, I think, because it shows Julie doing a very kind (if not intentional) thing for Anna that really makes the story sweet. I liked this very much.

Ed Jones (Level 4)

The title carries a doom-laden sense which does not suit this story of rivalry in the world of showjumping.
I believe 'rivalry' to be the intended subject though the story does not focus on any real conflict -- which is what we expect and hope for -- but more on how enjoyable a sport showjumping is.
There is much in this script that would be better cut and the space used to develop the characters of Miranda and Julie and fix what their goal is: they both want first prize. As it is, there are parts which seem addressed to the initiated or those who wish to be: '...keeps her seat in the saddle' does nothing to push the plot. The action of Miranda's successful jump needs to be trimmed to the essentials and the 'suspension moment' along with that paragraph need to be cut. And I think we need a more insightful response from Julie than her 'applause': she may be pleased her horse won but she wanted to be the winning rider.
The tail-braiding section adds little to the story and the action and V.O. is not clear. Had it been exploited more it would have highlighted a tension between them: Miranda is good at it and Julie needs 'every edge I can get'. The way it ends is unsatisfactory; 'I was lucky to have someone show me...' makes the episode seem irrelevant. This means the exchange; 'Looks like you had a late night.' and 'It wasn't too bad...' could be cut and the words put to more meaningful use.
The line 'She doesn't get to decide anything today' is used twice and its relevance is obscure so I think these could be safely cut.
The story ends with Miranda getting a ribbon which 'breaks Miranda's daydream'. I think it would be better without the daydream and a stronger injection of drama.

Faith Friese Nelson (Level 5)

A nice story with a “feel good” quality to it. A couple of comments that I could have easily ignored but, overall, very good.

In dialogue, always write out numbers unless the number is a date. Example: “We’re opening the hunter jumper class for 18 and older.” The numbers 18 should be written out as eighteen.

Also, the CONTD’s are not needed in dialogue in a spec script. If you are using Final Draft, you can turn this feature off

Gary Rademan (Level 5)

A woman falls off her mount setting up a last ride for a former champ * Story set up(overly?) rich with description * Dialogue and narrative felt forced * Read it aloud to someone and note their reactions * I did like the line "My leg is pisssed at me right now" * Story could use some tension * Ending was a fairy tale ending with no struggle * Best part MOMENT OF SUSPENSION where horse and rider became one *

QUESTIONS: Miranda allowed to sub like that with Taz as the point leader? * what exactly is Taz full of? * please show us * what's a warmblood? What was the significance of the lost peice of paper? Was the story about Miranda or Juiie|?

I felt coompelled to read this twice and still had the same confusions.

Geoffrey Forbes (Level 1)

It wasn't clear to me whether Miranda and Julie were mother and daughter, but I'm working on the premise that they were. From what I could tell Miranda is a seasoned rider with a lot of wins under her belt and Julie is struggling to get just one. There is a lot of room for conflict here which is what your story is missing. You've got two different kinds of conflict going on, which is good, the dramatic tension of Julie wanting to win at least one ribbon for Taz and the deadline of this being the last chance to do it, but as it reads right now, the stakes aren't high enough to make the most out of those two conflicts and there aren't enough obstacles to get the most out of them either.

Why does Julie want to win? Is she trying to win something more than a ribbon? Is she trying to win Miranda's respect? Her love? If so, then the current ending is an empty win for Julie, because it wasn't her that won, it was Miranda. That is, assuming, Julie is the protagonist, which seems to be the case since she is the only character to have stated her desires and is taking steps to achieve them.

I think that there needs to be some competition between either mother and daughter, or change the dynamics of the relationship between them so that there's more conflict in the story. Two possible approaches are to have the mother be in the competition and it's her that Julie has to beat, in order to win her respect. Or, if the story is more about Taz it can be a story about "proving them wrong" if Miranda, or perhaps other riders cast doubt on how viable it is for Taz to even compete let alone win. The second one might be preferable if you want to center around the relationship between Julie and Taz, which is the feeling I get when I read it. If that's the case, it wouldn't hurt to invent another rider, a snotty peer of Julie's to compete against who does nothing but badmouth Taz.

In either scenario, Julie can't be on the sidelines. A fall and a busted leg are good obstacles, but she needs to overcome them and win the prize herself, otherwise it isn't a win.

Another possibility is if you go the route of a a snotty rider badmouthing Taz, and you wanted Miranda to win, you could have Miranda state at the beginning that Taz has no chance, the snotty girl says he has no chance and Julie's the only one who believes in him, but Julie hurts herself and Miranda comes around to see how important it is to Julie and takes the reins and wins. In which case, you wouldn't need to change much, but then the win is still Julie's win, since she was the one who was right about Taz.

The stuff about losing the phone number was unnecessary and confusing, I'd cut that out. I'm guessing it's in there for an excuse for Miranda not to be competing so she can take Julie's place, but a box of ribbons is enough. At this point, Miranda has nothing to prove and as stated, it's better if Julie wins.

A note about format, overall it was a very easy read. There was one spot that I got hung up on and that was the voice over where they were talking about braiding that was added to the scene before. I'd stick that dialog in the next scene. It confuses the reader when a line comes out of context like that and it makes it harder to make sure that line is accounted for during shooting. Transitions like that are decided in the editing room. The script should only be a shot list to make sure everything is recorded. As it is written, it is possible to pick that up ADR after shooting is done, or catch it as wild lines during shooting, but it's just easier to do it when you're shooting the scene it's a part of when you're gonna be set up for it anyway and it decreases the chance of letting it slip through the cracks and not getting it at all.

Overall I can certainly see this as a short movie. Up the stakes, add more obstacles and make it Julie's win and I think it would be an excellent script. Story is conflict, so pile it on.

Graham Trelfer (Level 4)

There is lovely writing style here, but I wondered how much of that translates to screen, I thought at times I was reading a short story rather than a short screenplay - especially the last page with Miranda riding the horse to victory. Without the knowledge of horse riding it could just look like the horse makes three successful jumps. I was also unsure of whose story this was suppose to be. At first it seems like it is Julie's story as she is the one who has something to learn, but then Julie gets thrown and it is up for Miranda to save the day and because she has been established as a pro it is not very surprising that she wins. So is the horse the main character? The horse is the character that changes the most which is what you want to see in a main character, but I am not sure the horse has a better life because of this.

Greg Tonnon (Level 5)

The title is good as it sets up the story well. Your craft is almost flawless, the only thing missing was FADE IN:. The story is nice but not very exciting and for me, it dragged a bit in the middle. The dialogue was excellent. The ending was good so overall I gave it a very good.

Heather O'Connell (Level 4)

I can't pretend that I understand all the horse talk, but I know enough horse lovers to know how popular this kind of story is. It's well written, but maybe a little slow. I am a bit lost at the meaning of the lost phone number.

Herman Chow (Level 5)

I think this is very nice and sweet. A very traditional story where the underdog becoming the champion, with a mentor-apprentice relationship added in.

I got the overall story, but there are some details that left me confused. What's with the phone number in Miranda's pocket? It doesn't seem important to the story. It flew out of her pocket, so she lost it, but I didn't know how it created a complication or obstacle.

The rest of the script was good and paced well. I especially liked the four line paragraph detailing Taz's jump. "Two body in perfect harmony. A rider's dream." Very nice visuals there.

Some closure about Miranda and Julie's relationship would be nice, too.

VERY GOOD.

Jeannie Sconzo (Level 5)

VG.
Nicely detailed. Good dialogue. Not much surprise, but still engaging.

JeanPierre Chapoteau (Moderator)

Wow. Very well written. I even like how you broke some of the "rules" at the end there, telling us that it was the suspenseful moment.

Your character spoke perfectly. Your descriptions were very crisp. I don't see a flaw in the story. Even though I'm not really interested in the subject, I can clearly see that this was a perfectly written script.

Excellent job. Should be a winner.

Jem Rowe (Level 4)

This is written very well, so much attention to the details of the horse riding world, but at no point did I feel myself caring much for what would happen next. Since the events of the piece are quite commonplace and unremarkable, this feels like a story that someone would tell you from their personal experiece, but without knowing the people involved there's no real reason for the reader to be interested.

"Good" You seem to have a natural talent for allowing your thoughts to flow onto the page, so I imagine you'll go far, just try to find a story that's a little more memorable.

Jon Hill (Level 4)

I'm guessing you like horses. (:

My main criticism is there's a distinct lack of conflict in your script. Everything is too nice, none of you characters have any serious obstacles to overcome.

For example, you could add a back story where Miranda is afraid to ride horses following a traumatic riding accident, but forces herself to ride Taz as she wants to help Miranda.

Or... You could have Miranda and Julie as bickering sisters, arguing over some petty feud (e.g. when they were young, Miranda accidently cost Julie a riding championship). When Miranda decides to ride Taz, Julie is touched and forgives her sister.

Or... you could have a third rider, an obnoxious bitch of a character who Julie desperately wants to beat. When Julie falls off her horse, she asks Miranda to take Taz and beat-the-bitch!

...as it stands, your story is a little flat.

My other criticism is your actual writing was a little too long-winded. For example, the use of the word "then" disrupts the flow, and some of the dialogue is a little clunky.

Justin Ryan Colon (Level 4)

While I feel that the conflict was realistic, it wasn't something that in my opinion will make for an overly interesting or unique movie. I didn't feel any suspence at the end- I had a feeling the script would conclude with a fairytale ending, and I was correct.

However, I feel that the writing was very good. And the script was mature. It did keep my attention. I just would have loved to feel more conflict and more suspense.

Khamanna Iskandarova (Level 5)

You capped 'warmblood' but didnt' cap 'thoroughbred'. Must be from someone who loves and understands horses...let me think.

I think you could shoot it. Ask someone who has horses to shoot it maybe?

This was finely paced. Flows nicely. A very good story, very well told.
It may win too. I don't know what else to say, sorry - got no feedback.

Kirk White (Level 5)

well written and nicely paced. this kind of film is not really my cup of tea, but you have mad skills!

KP Mackie (Level 5)

Lovely story about the love affair between riders and their horses. A lot of visual quality. The initial picture of Miranda walking Jewel along the "split-rail fence, " gazing at open acreage "under the late day haze" is wonderful. Miranda and Julie (plus Jewel and Taz) are easy character names to remember. Julie's young, impulsive woman versus Miranda, the calm veteran, is good contrast. The various riding props add to the ambiance.
May not need to end with the Caller's dialogue announcing Taz as the winner. The description of the girl clipping the ribbon is colorful and perfectly clear.
Terrific title.

Kyle Patrick Johnson (Level 5)

I had to google "warmblood". You might want to mention that's a kind of horse, because it seemed confusing.

I wasn't sure why the lost phone number was such a big deal. That theme doesn't reappear on the last two and a half pages.

Why is it so fulfilling for Miranda to win? Perhaps we need to know that she had a frustrated past (like the coach from Disney's "Miracle") in order to be able to cheer with her at the end.

This is very nice. Not a lot of tension, no real suspense, but nice. Even the broken bone seemed expected. It's like a family Disney movie boiled down into five minutes, beat for beat. It's excellently written, but the story just seemed so by-the-numbers that it failed to grab me. So, Very Good.

Margaret Ricke (Level 5)

I like the title with this story. Good choice.

You have a very pleasant way of telling your story. It isn't bookish, and it isn't script-ish. It's just right.

I don't know if you work with horses or you did your research, but you bring a knowledge of your subject to this story that's admirable. Nice work.

Marnie Mitchell Lister (Level 5)

No doubt this was well written but I'm confused by it. There was more detail on the horses and the jumps than the women. Who were they? What was their relationship?

It almost felt like a scene from something bigger. Like you started us at a point where we should have know these women already. It defintely felt like a scene more than a complete story.

And it moved a little slow because we weren't learning anything new. We were just watching these two ladies interact with their horses and vaguely interact with each other. I don't know...curious to hear what other think.

Martin Jensen (Level 5)

I felt this story easily could have become sentimental, but I like how you managed to keep it feeling realistic by not having the characters make too much of a deal about it being her last ride.

I especially like how you've written the climax. Everything is clear. The 'suspension moment' reads like it's in slow motion.

"The only thing I’m taking is you -- to the hospital."
This line and one or two others sounded too much like movie dialogue, if you know what I mean. It took me out of the story briefly.

What's most impressive is how you managed to make me emotionally invested in the outcome of show jumping. Very good.

Michael Hughes (Level 4)

I thought the script was well done and flowed nicely from scene to scene. I like the double meaning of the title as well. I think, from a character development point of view, I would have liked to have seen a little bit more to help reinforce the point that the Miranda character was past her prime (taking the phone number was a nice way to show she was considering participating in the competition, but there wasn't much to show why she shouldn't take part.) I am not familiar enough with the sport to judge whether her age would automatically convey this.
Nice work.

Moises Sosa (Level 1)

The dialogue, scene details, cuts, and everything else was good for the most part. The content wasn't there though. I found myself speed reading through the whole thing. I couldn't wait to get to the end. That says a lot about a script. You have all the works of an excellent script. But without content, all the technical details won't serve any purpose.

Patrick Roe (Level 2)

The part about the phone number falling out of Miranda's pocket seems slightly irrelevant since she ends up at the competition anyways. I think the scene could be a lot more engaging if the build up was about the struggle of getting the horse to the competition on time. I get the feeling like we should know this is a winning horse from the start, and be on the edge of our seats waiting to see if she will actually get the chance to compete and show her stuff.

Patrick Skaggs (Level 3)

I did not find this story very compelling…it seemed “stock” to me. Maybe it is my lack of interest in and knowledge of the subject matter we are dealing with here, but I didn’t seem to care very much about the characters by the time we reached the clichéd ending. I don’t think I understand what the whole phone number tab story element was about. Did Miranda want to enter the show but was concerned about competing against Julie? I found that a little confusing. I hope this doesn't seem to harsh. I'm not saying the author should give up. This just wasn't something I liked.

Paul De Vrijer (Level 5)

The final call is a bit too much and i think this story would be better appreciated by real horse fans. I dont see how it does much new for the horsesport genre but still nicely done.

Paul Williams (Level 5)

I felt this was a nice, well-written script. It feels weird writing this, but there have actually been a lot of dramas with plot-points involving horses. I suppose because they're such beautiful, majestic creatures that it lends itself to movies/novels.

Your screenwriting is fine, but this was a slow, bulky read. Slim down the narrative and only relate to us what is vitally important to move the plot along.

Format overall appears in order. Didn't detect any major typos.

Philip Whitcroft (Level 5)

I like the tension around the preparations for the show and the doubts on Miranda entering or not. I also like the idyllic setting. For me I wonder if it makes sense to have some more explicit conflict between the women early in the story, because it seemed to feel a bit too comfortable.

The last scene is a strong upbeat resolution that is well described.

Pia Cook (Level 5)

Ah, finally a subject matter I know something about. Horses, horse business and horse shows!

First of all, no good trainer tells a student to go gallop off some steam before they go into a hunter/jumper ring. Long schooling time perhaps, but gallop? Don't think so. I saw the accident coming a mile away. Another thing about horse stories is that they seem to always end in some sort of underdog win or something like that so the ending was hardly a surprise either.

It was well written and structured story and I liked the subject matter. Good work on that. I just thought it was too predictable and didn't like her just watching the young girl go off for a gallop. Other than that, good show!! :)

Rustom Irani (Moderator)

You've done plenty of research or probably are an avid horse rider and it definitely shows in your writing.

While this style is a fresh take on the theme this month, I also felt a bit disjointed being a bit unfamiliar with that aspect. To me those technical bits of writing took away from the drama and the latter seemed to depend too much on the former.

There is a sense of the Older Miranda wanting to achieve one last shot at her passion but it takes a bit too long to get there.

You have tried to show glimpses when she takes the ticket with the intention of perhaps attempting the show but then not following it through when she finds the ticket is lost.

The earlier attempt seemed a tad sinister and I was thinking she'd do something dark to sabotage the younger Julie's attempt.

I love the names, setting and the well visualised final event when she takes the reins. The back-story is apt as well.

But the dramatic bits needed to push through and even Julie's fall actually did need concern and more attention. Dare I say it, not being a part of the requirement this month would've helped tremendously with the story.

I definitely want to see a re-write without you having to stick with just these two.

Good job!

Sally Meyer (Moderator)

While the script is well written and there's no errors in grammar etc, I don't feel pulled into the story. The reason being that there's not a lot of story here.

We have two women who obviously love horses. One has won many ribbons, and from what I could gather maybe is jealous of the other.

Julie can't control her horse, she rides off, and gets hurt. Miranda takes over. Taz wins, the end. There's not a lot of conflict I guess.

In a story there should be some antagonist, I don't see one here. I think that is what is missing.

Sylvia Dahlby (Level 5)

I wanted to like this, well drawn & visual, but was not feeling any real suspense or drama. What was at stake? Maybe I missed something but the characters didn't have much differentiation and I was not drawn into the story. The ending was spoiled by "editorial" in the exposition (show don't tell: "This is the ‘suspension moment.’ Two bodies in perfect harmony. A rider’s dream. Horse and rider land. All rails intact. Course complete") - I'm not feeling triumphant either.

Teo Gonzalez (Level 4)

As a story, I'd say I think this one is good. I say "I tink" because I am not sure. I do not know what the story is about. Yes, some events happen; some hurdles are overcome; but what does that mean? What do they mean? The older and more experienced woman knows how to ride the horse to victory? But what does this means for her? Beacuse of the title, I get the idea that this was some sort of retirement for Miranda and so her victory is doubly meaningful, but is it? I find no indication on the script whereas to her motivations -as a materr of fact, it is just by chance that she even competes. So yes, I think this story is good. I also think that this story could be very good or excellent if it was well explained, but it is not.

Technically, I see you dare to venture a VO transition. Very good. I've seen those criticized in the past by people who didn't know better. I hope this time is different. My main suggestion goes to the dialogue. I think you could improve it.

Good luck.

Travis DeStein (Level 5)

You use a lot of specific horse riding terminology that I didn't understand. Try and find a more accessible way to write that stuff. For a while this story didn't really have much of a direction or pacing. I know the horse show was coming up and all, but it never felt like it was given the gravity or importance it should have. For most of the story it just kinda wandered. I liked that you had a complete story with a beginning/middle/end and I think if you touched this up a bit it could be a much better script.

Wes Worthing (Level 5)

The premise doesn't excite or compel me personally, but it's certainly beautifully written and will get a high score. I can sense the writer knows their horses, or did the proper research. Nothing over-dramatic or contrived about the plot. An even tone throughout. Great job.

Zach Jansen (Level 4)

A handful of typos throughout.

How do we know what Jewel is hunting for? All we see is a horse nuzzling a jacket.

This one really didn’t do anything for me. Simple story, but I didn’t care much about the characters and the story.

Comments Made After the Contest

Wes Worthing (Level 5) ~ 4/1/2011 12:37 AM

Excellent writing as always
Great job!

Paul De Vrijer (Level 5) ~ 4/1/2011 12:51 AM

This read like it was written by a female. A knowledgable female rider. Strong entry absolutely, I think you just missed out on a mention.

KP Mackie (Level 5) ~ 4/1/2011 1:14 AM

A VG from me, friend. Loved this. So much visually that it would make a beautiful movie. Should have finished at the top.

Khamanna Iskandarova (Level 5) ~ 4/1/2011 1:16 AM

I thought it was Caroline's at first (but then learned she hasn't submitted). Loved it!

JeanPierre Chapoteau (Moderator) ~ 4/1/2011 1:32 AM

I thought this was Caroline's as well. I gave you an excellent. I'll look at other people's comments to see how this couldn't have possibly placed.

Heather O'Connell (Level 4) ~ 4/1/2011 11:48 AM

I think the reason this didn't place better is because not everyone can relate to the subject. Horses - you either love them or you don't. This movie would be a hit with young girls (the ones I know, anyway.)

Kyle Patrick Johnson (Level 5) ~ 4/1/2011 1:29 PM

As always, Rick, a very solid and professional entry. Good job!