Ayal Pinkus (Level 5) ~ 4/14/2012 3:54 AM
How about "Out Of Control"? It has multiple meanings. The daughter was out of control, now she works at a nursing home and what she does not control what she has to do every day, her love life is out of control with the two love interests. Sounds like the daughter is constantly having to deal with elements of her life being out of control.
Like the story idea a lot!!! Like how the two love interests represent the two worlds.
Reginald McGhee (Level 0) ~ 4/14/2012 4:40 AM
Hmmm, if the daughter is out of cntrol, I think I would call it, "The Devil's Advocate," or "The Devil Made Me Do It," but it could be too long. I always try to come up with an external title (like "The Jessica Man," the title I entered in the logline contest, and a tite I thought was visual, instead of "The Hate Game," which is internal).
Austin Bennett (Level 4) ~ 4/14/2012 4:58 AM
The Devil Made Me Do It would be good if this was a satanic horror film, but its not. I'll think about Out of Control and see if it firs after a couple of days. I've been follwing the Hero's Journey, so its nice that you caught on to her having another love interest in the special world.
I've had this script on the back burner for a few months and I'm very excited to start it up again. I should have a first draft ready in about six days, or so. I try to write ten pages a day.
Thanks for the suggestions!
Ayal Pinkus (Level 5) ~ 4/14/2012 7:11 AM
Austin, funny you should say that because it did remind me of the Archetypes from the Hero's Journey. The older mother can be an Ally/Mentor. The person running the nursery home can be the Threshold Guardian, initially appearing to be the Antagonist but eventually helping the Protagonist reach her full potential.
Now I'm rambling ;-) Good luck, sounds like a great idea, lots of scene ideas pop up in my head.
Ayal Pinkus (Level 5) ~ 4/14/2012 7:20 AM
Sorry, the older woman is the Threshold Guardian and the grandson the Ally/Mentor maybe.
Scott Merrow (Level 5) ~ 4/14/2012 7:47 AM
Alex Hollister (Level 4) ~ 4/14/2012 8:36 AM
How about 'Nursing Wounds'.
Has meaning plus obvious play on word 'Nursing' with 'Wounds' being more psychological. The wounds opened by feuding mother-daughter relationships. Psychological wounds.
I also like the 'Assisted Living' suggestion. Double meaning with nursing home with how a mother assists her daughter to live even though petulant teenagers are sometimes to stubborn and hormonal to realize it.
Sally Meyer (Moderator) ~ 4/14/2012 10:16 AM
Titles are so important. I love your concept, this story sounds like the kind of films, I love to write.
How about titles that address the relationship with April, using her name, because that is who the film is about, but with April also being a month, using that word in the title could be interesting.
Searching for April
Me and April
Or titles that have meanings about fights and conflict
Sticks and Stones
Don't talk, just listen.
Dave Kunz (Level 4) ~ 4/14/2012 10:17 AM
After I read the first post my eyes happened to fall to Alex's suggestion: "Nursing Wounds" and my immediate reaction was "that's it." So take that for what it's worth.
Margaret Ricke (Level 5) ~ 4/14/2012 10:55 AM
Why is April so out of control? What's fueling that fire?
That would seem like a good place to look for a title.
I think using "April" in the title will only work if there's a sweetness to the story. You might have that with the Betty White type character. It's hard to know without more information.
David M Troop (Level 5) ~ 4/14/2012 10:56 AM
I think your best bet is some sort of play on words using her name. The daughter's name is April, so you have an endless supply.
April Dawn - This could be her actual first and middle name, and refer to the dawning of a new person she becomes by working with the elderly and learning to be a better person through their experiences.
April Morning - Same idea as above, but this could also be a nickname one elderly woman gives to her. The woman of course teaches April to be a good person by retelling (in flashback) stories of her troubled youth and strained relation with her mother. When April fully blooms as a person, the elderly woman dies.
Sorry, i don't want to highjack your movie. It sounds like an awesome script.
Hope I could help.
Austin Bennett (Level 4) ~ 4/14/2012 11:54 AM
I love Assisted Living but it has a bit to much comedy and lightness about it. I want some humor, but this is definitely not a comedy. The comedy is very dry and not SitCom/farce.
Nursing Wounds may work too but it sounds like a Lifetime movie, which is what I thought about Bad Daughter.
April's Aunt Bonnie is Terry's mentor and April's threshold guardian. Bonnie runs the nursing home. One of April's classmates, who works at the home, is another guardian. The two despise each other.
A year or so before the movie starts, Terry and April's dad are involved in a car accident. Dad dies and April blames Terry.
I like Sticks and Stones.
Thanks for the feedback!
Tim Westland (Moderator) ~ 4/14/2012 12:01 PM
"Assisted Living" has my vote. It ties into how April is forced to help the elderly woman, but is in turn helped by her.
Feels organic and true.
Sally Meyer (Moderator) ~ 4/14/2012 12:06 PM
Or Don't listen. Just talk.
Ammar Salmi (Level 5) ~ 4/14/2012 4:58 PM
"Waiting for May" would be my suggestion. You have to edit your story though, so the her punishment will end in May.
The subtle meaning is the mother's wish for her daughter to grow mature. -April,May...-
Just a thought. Good luck with the project.
Reginald McGhee (Level 0) ~ 4/14/2012 6:11 PM
Waiting for April, and Then May." WOuldn't that be something interesting...?
KP Mackie (Level 5) ~ 4/14/2012 10:32 PM
Olga Tremaine (Level 4) ~ 4/15/2012 12:27 AM
Ayal Pinkus (Level 5) ~ 4/15/2012 3:07 AM
I like "April", it is a nice word, goes well with a nice girl (who struggles to grow up).